User:Bandoputt/History of the Pittsburgh Steelers/TravisNewell Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Who I am reviewing: Bandoputt


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 * Editing User:Bandoputt/History of the Pittsburgh Steelers - Wikipedia


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 * History of the Pittsburgh Steelers - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Although it does not seem like you typed up what you want to put into the article, your proposal seems really good and well thought out. I like the idea on how the steelers culture effects Pittsburgh and the surrounding area. Including more information on some important players is another good idea, as this would make the article more detail. With all of your ideas I'd assume you will reach the word requirement easily. Nonetheless I believe I have some suggestions that could make this assignment easier for you to complete. Firstly, you could talk about the immaculate reception, and how some people belief that the ball actually hit the ground. Furthermore, this article has not talked about the Steelers recent seasons, so adding some information to these seasons could be a good way to improve the article. One interesting fact you could include is the fact that Mike Tomlin has now beaten every team in the league.