User:Bandzvlad/Mohammed Khadda/Bumblebeatrice Peer Review

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Bandzvlad
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 * User:Bandzvlad/Mohammed Khadda
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Evaluate the drafted changes
The edits made were very concise and both simplified some of the information that was already there as well as added missing information. One suggestion I had for you was for this part: "His father, Bendehiba Khadda, was born in 1912 in the town of Mina and moved to Mostaganem at a very young age. He was born blind, yet held various occupations such as a bricklayer and a dock worker." I got confused about who was "he" and thought the artist was blind. Additionally, for one sentence under "art" you wrote "For most part of it, he worked along with his friend, Benanteur." and I think you may have forgotten to delete "part" or "most," but that's just a small typo. I also would suggest that you add a citation after every claim/sentence you write (maybe you did and I just can't see it). You also state that he would use his art to convey his political beliefs. Maybe expand on what those beliefs were and if/how he contributed to those political movements. The lead is very clear and concise and the edits you made seem very neutral and well-founded. I think the most important thing to do is cite your sources.