User:Barkerak7064/Giardia duodenalis/Packarec3037 Peer Review

General info
I am peer reviewing an article about Giardia duodenalis by Barkerak7064
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Barkerak7064/Giardia_duodenalis?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Giardia duodenalis

Evaluate the drafted changes
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 * Will the geographical prevalence be added under the "Prevalence and Ecology" section of the article?  If so, I think that is a good idea.
 * Maybe discuss some more specific countries for this section, you mention the United States and it is a developed country but maybe mention the prevalence in a developing country that is a tropical climate as well.
 * Other than that, this is a good section!
 * For the epidemiology section, the numbers in parentheses such as "(4)" are a bit confusing. If they are citations, you should hyperlink them and then it will add them to your reference pages. A bit of the wording/grammar in the first paragraph could be fixed such as capitalizing the start of sentences and adding a word or two to make the sentence make sense.
 * I really like the last paragraphs information in the epidemiology section, just make sure to add citations as I am sure this information and the statistics come from sources. You might also want to add some more details, such as where/what location the statistics for the 7% of children was found.
 * I'm not sure if it would fit but maybe add how it is treated or the lifespan of the disease when someone or something like an animal in infected.
 * I think you remained neutral throughout your additions, so that is great! You also have a variety of sources as well which is good.
 * You could also maybe add another sentence about re-infection or chronic infections.
 * In terms of addressing equity, you could maybe touch on why it is difficult for lower income countries to deal with the disease or something similar touching on equity.