User:Barsoumd/Scolopendra Polymorpha/Tisaachsu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Barsoumd (David Barsoum)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Barsoumd/Scolopendra_Polymorpha?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): NA

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Good introduction that covers both species habitat and overview
 * May want to consider putting the paragraph starting with "Their bodes..." under a new body heading
 * A sentence summarizing the body paragraph topics might be helpful

Content:


 * Very informative overall but could use a little more on species life cycle and behavior
 * Information about "venom" is very informative and well fleshed out
 * May want to delete the unused headings (ie. lead, article body)

Tone & Balance:


 * Neutral tone in general, avoid terms like "very" and such
 * Good balance in the content of the article, but as mentioned above, at least one other body heading would be more encompassing
 * May want to check up on some of your sentence structures
 * Try to limit the amount of sentences you start with clauses

Sources & Relevance:


 * Your sources look credible but very biased toward talking about "venom"
 * May want to consider looking for ones that also cover life cycle/behavior
 * Can also link other Wikipedia articles
 * Need to add your citations to your bibliography page

Organization:


 * Nice job, well organized considering you started from scratch
 * Consider making the second paragraph of your introduction into a second body paragraph

Images & Media:


 * Pictures are all relevant (about target species)
 * Consider starting the captions for the images differently for variation

Overall:


 * Overall very nice article
 * Ideas are well fleshed out and backed with reputable citations
 * Could use some minor revisions on organization and sentence structure
 * Need to add citations to bibliography page