User:Barsoumd/Zerene eurydice/Tisaachsu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lbeqaj (Linda Beqaj)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Barsoumd/Zerene_eurydice?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Zerene eurydice - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Good introduction but seems a little brief
 * You might also consider adding a few more sentences detailing some of your body paragraphs

Content:


 * Great organization of information, very concise and to the point
 * Seems a little too similar to the base article, you may want to add more diverse information
 * I liked your body headings since they covered both the species description as well as habitat
 * You may consider adding another body paragraph about something miscellaneous (ie. conservation)

Tone & Balance:


 * Overall has neutral tone, no perspective persuasion
 * Good balance of internal sentence variation although many of your sentences start with "The..."
 * Although this gives a less biased tone, it might be a little bland if used a few sentences in a row
 * Limit the amount of sentences you start with clauses

Sources & Relevance:


 * Your sources seem credible but only a few are journal articles
 * You may want to add more (maybe 3-5) more journal/book citations to buff up your article
 * Can also link other Wikipedia articles
 * Need to add your citations to your bibliography page

Organization:


 * I liked your organization, very concise and encompassing
 * If anything, I would recommend more sentence structure improvements
 * The body headings are good but you may consider adding another body paragraph

Images & Media:


 * No images on draft sandbox
 * You might want to add a few images off of Wikimedia Commons to supplement the ones already on the base article

Overall:


 * Good article, content-wise
 * Needs some images and media
 * Could use some minor revisions on organization and sentence structure
 * Need to add citations to bibliography page