User:Basilgreenmint1/Subsistence agriculture/Jupiter2457 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Trufflehunter5 and Basilgreenmint1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Basilgreenmint1/Subsistence_agriculture?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Subsistence agriculture

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Similar to the lead of the existing article, however the information is concise and informative to the information that will be presented throughout the article. Missing a citation in the draft after the direct quote, but I do see it in the existing article.

Content: History- same as existing article. Contemporary Practices- Information that is added is relevant to the existing article. Will your group go into more detail about the challenges that modern subsistent agriculturists face? Climate Change Impact- This new section is going to be key for tying in the environmental justice component to the existing article. Should be expanded.

References: Clearly organized and used appropriately. References in sandbox are currently and relate to the topic of subsistent agriculture.

Overall Impressions: Good work so far! Not a lot of new material added but I can see the vision for adding small bits of information throughout. Keeps a neutral tone in the added portions. I think expanding on the ideas you added to bring in more of the environmental justice angle will really elevate your groups contributions (I know this is a very light rough draft). Keep up the good work!

Response:

Hi! I think we got a little confused and started posting all of our edits to the live article as well as on our draft so that might be why you don't see too much new material! Thanks for the idea for challenges in contemporary practices, we will definitely expand on that!