User:Batuolana/False Advertising/Hunter.browne Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Batuolana


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Batuolana/False_Advertising?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/False_advertising

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that overall, they are really great additions. I think that changing the spelling of concidered to considered is something that is a minor fix. I also think that explaining a little more about what the use of false or misleading is tied to. Like is is statements or what specifically. I would change the spelling of wither to either. I would also reword that last sentence so that it is not as long. The sources are very reliable, and the tone of the additions are neutral. It is straight facts with the bias left out. That alone is very important. The lead is there, but like many others, we both need to add to that. All the links work and are correct. I think that only thing that needs to be changed is just looking over the spelling and the structures of the sentences, but the content is exactly what is needed. I looked at the article, and it said that it needs more verified sources so it will be able to contribute to better the article. I also really appreciated that they said even the section from the source where they retrieved the information from.