User:Bayley1234/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Famine in Yemen (2016–present)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because it is an often overlooked but severe and wide-scale concern pertaining to how war on the environment kills through hunger. My preliminary impression of the article was that it gives a very brief but impactful overview of the crisis that touches on both its causes and consequences. It seems greater depth and detail could be added to the article as a whole.

Evaluate the article
The article was an informative overview of the scale and key insights on the crisis, but there are certain changes and additions I would make.


 * I found the first sentence to be slightly unclear, particularly where it adds "which started during the Yemeni Civil War". I would clarify that the Yemeni Civil War is ongoing and that the food insecurity crisis is primarily a result of the Yemeni Civil War, stated later in the lead section.
 * The lead says "UNICEF described Yemen as 'the largest humanitarian crisis in the world'", but Yemen is the country, not the crisis. I would reword this.
 * The lead includes data which is not present in the major sections of the article. I would move this data to the major sections and instead use the lead to focus on summarizing the impacts highlights by the data, actors in the crisis, and the major sections in the article.
 * I would include further information on the following: the involvement of the United States, the United Kingdom, and other colonial powers in the war or its funding, and in the history of imperialism in Yemen; various perspectives on foreign humanitarian aid for the crisis, such as a decolonial perspective which believes in self-determination; how COVID-19 and climate change have exacerbated the food insecurity crisis; the Houthi history and perspective.
 * Although the author has good reason to feel personal bias, the article does not include the perspectives of the Saudi Arabian government and other governments involved in the intervention and blockade, making the article appear partial.
 * Most sources used are news articles from American and British papers. I would recommend that the author minimize the number of news articles used by either replacing them with or adding information from peer-reviewed articles. I would also recommend that they include global perspectives from other news sources.

Overall, I would focus on including a greater diversity of perspectives and more credible sources.