User:Bberumen/Eco-evolutionary Dynamics/MarleyMae21 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bberumen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bberumen/Eco-evolutionary_Dynamics?action=edit

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, super interesting read! I think the lead section is good. One suggestion I would have would be to change up that last sentence, and maybe just kinda summarize what your content section were about, so sorta like you would in an intro to a paper. It was a little hard to tell where the article was going to go after the lead. I thought you did a nice job of defining it and giving it some significance though!

Content - I loved the last section. The more detailed examples helped to clarify a lot of things, and I think they will help a reader who may be reading this with only limited knowledge not he subject. I did add some invisible comments on some suggestions for possible rephrasing. I also thing that maybe you could elaborate more on the examples you used in the earlier sections.. So you bring up a lot of examples early on, but never describe them. It might be easier to just pick one or two and go into details on them from the sources you have cited.

Tone- Neutral, not persuasive. Nice writing style, easy to understand!

Sources - The sources I clicked on worked and I didn't see any issues with the in-text citations on my end.

Images - you could add an image or two, maybe of whatever organism is most popular from the examples you mentioned or something.. just to compliment the text!

Overall - it was a great read, very clear that you researched the topic well before writing. Great job!