User:Bcmcelwee03/1999 İzmit earthquake/Nicksalanitri Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bcmcelwee03, Alwyn2105, Akipar, Will Mullally


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bcmcelwee03/1999_%C4%B0zmit_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1999 İzmit earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

After reading both your article evaluation and your contributions to the article I think you guys have the right idea of what information you should be researching and you're asking yourselves the right questions. Like you said its important that you ensure data such as the casualities is confirmed and researched more so that the specific causes of death can be accurately shared with the readers. I think that imccluding more images would also be a great idea. You mentioned having images of the rescuse mission and the map of the affected area; I would add both of these but also add some images of specific buildings that were damaged if possible. I think that users being able to directly see the damage that was caused may give them a better understanding of the earthquake rather than just seeing a map and a magnitude. I would also add at the end of your earthquake section a short description of when the next earthquake may occur in this seismic gap, if you are able to find information about that online, I'm not sure if that exists. I think it may be good to add an image of a map that gives the reader an idea of where past earthquakes have occured along this seismic area so that they can visualize the seismic gap and understand where earthquakes may happen next. I like that you defined these seismic gaps, but I would just include some type of visual to go along with it. And finally I would just make sure you clean up the grammar and sentence structure of the previously written article sections like you mentioned, I wouldn't say it needs to be super formal, but just making sure it sounds better and has been fact checked will make it better, but you guys are already looking into that so good job overall. Nick S.

Response - Bridget McElwee
Thanks for putting time into this review, I agree with a lot of your comments and will use them to better my draft. I will look into getting more images and information about the seismic area, as well as clean up the grammar of the original article.