User:Bdlogan90/Pain management/Hayelizabeth24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bdlogan90


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bdlogan90/Pain_management?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pain management

Evaluate the drafted changes
When you stated "perception of pain", what exactly were you trying to get at? That may need to be reworded just so it is more clear as to what exactly you were trying to say. When you are saying they I am assuming you are talking about the women. In the last sentence where it says "So simply based on gender persons", I would recommend putting a comma between gender and persons for that sentence to make more sense and understandable to readers when reading the article.