User:Bdorado/Undulated moray/SujitraN Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bdorado


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bdorado/Undulated_moray?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Undulated moray
 * Undulated moray

Evaluate the drafted changes
Please answer the following questions in detail addressed to the classmate whose article you are reviewing. Remember this is constructive feedback, so be polite and clear in your suggestions for improving their article. We are all working together to improve the Wikipedia pages for the amazing species.

Use a different font style (bold or italic) for your answers so it is easy for the author to see your comments!


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? (Think about content, structure, complementing the existing article, writing, etc.)They have a decent amount of content on their page, which is good because it was probably difficult to find the information for the species. Also, they filled in all the required sections.
 * 2) * Is there anything from your review that impressed you? The research. It must've taken a bit to find all the relevant information because I noticed they used so many different articles in their draft. I need to find information because I feel some sections are lacking.
 * 3) * Any turn of phrase that described the species in a clear way? "They move in S shape" this stuck with me because not a lot of species are described this way. The choice of words and the fact creates a good combination to describe the species. I tried to make the information easy to read for any viewer.
 * 4) Check the main points of the article:
 * 5) * Does the article only discuss the species the article is about? (and not the genus or family) It only discusses the species they were assigned.
 * 6) * Are the subtitles for the different sections appropriate? Yes, each of the sections was appropriate and met the requirements for the assignments.
 * 7) * Is the information under each section appropriate or should anything be moved? Yes, all the information were backed up with references and is relevant to the topic with no sidetracks.
 * 8) * Is the writing style and language of the article appropriate? (concise and objective information for a worldwide audience) Yes, the author used concise and clear language which helps readers like me understand it much easier. The appropriate information and structure were there, and the grammar was good. I wanted the information to be understood by anyone who reads it.
 * 9) Check the sources:
 * 10) * Is each statement or sentence in the text linked to at least one source in the reference list with a little number? Yes
 * 11) * Is there a reference list at the bottom? yes, but is it not in MLA format, just linked to the page. I need to organize my reference list.
 * 12) * Is each of those sources linked with a little number? Yes.
 * 13) * What is the quality of the sources? A good quality. The information that is needed is there and It is well-written inappropriate language. Plus, the sources are linked and backed up in each statement and they also have a reference page.
 * 14) Give some suggestions on how to improve the article (think of anything that could be explained in more detail or with more clarity or any issues addressed in the questions above): I would say to add just a few more sentences to each section they already have. It doesn't have to be any drastic changes, but 2-3 sentences more in each section would tie everything together and give the readers more information.
 * 15) * What changes do you suggest and how would they improve the article? To add a little more information just to tie the articles together before publishing, and just so the readers have more to read. Most of my sections need more information so they don't look so bare.
 * 16) * Is the article ready for prime-time and the world to see on Wikipedia? If not, how could the author improve the article to be ready? I think that with a little fixing, the articles can be published. Adding the references in a format and adding some slight information would tie the articles together since the author already has good information written down and wrote it well. I need to format my sources and add more information to each section.
 * 17) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? The reference links should be in MLA format, not just linked. Even though it is listed, it looks better if it has in a format. Plus some additional information to tie the articles together. My reference list is where I feel I was lacking.
 * 18) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Human use sections, I had a difficult time trying to find information about it, but after looking at their information and reference page, I have more of an idea of how to fix my articles and make it better. Finding information on cultural significance and human use was difficult to find.