User:BeanoMill092/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Bathyphysa conifera

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose Bathyphysa conifera because it is in the taxa of interest (Siphonophora) for my final project group. Siphonophores are a largely unknown order of organisms and more research needs to be done to fully understand them and the rest of the deep sea. These creatures are strange, with all of them being made up of individual zooids to make up a single colonial organism. A specific area of interest is the life history these zooids go through as they mature into their specialized roles.

Evaluate the article
Although a lot is unknown about this specific species, I believe there is more that can be added to the page:


 * A more complete description of the organism. The body plan is described under "Description" however, the main features (pneumatophore, siphosome, etc.) are only mentioned. The structures and functions of these features are not described in detail and it is unclear about where they are located on the organism.
 * The lead section does not summarize all of the article's main sections, with "Description" being largely left out. This could be the section to put the formal names for features found on B. conifera, with more detailed explanations being found later in the article.
 * The article is not the easiest to read, being full of technical jargon that may be unknown to readers outside the intended field. This makes the article inaccessible and harder for non-experts to understand and appreciate.


 * More pictures should be provided. If possible, individual zooids should be zoomed in upon to view each separate individual and highlight the uniformity found within the organism.
 * "Distribution" should include the range of depths this organism can be found at, if known. The deep sea is a large space and depth is one way of narrowing down where to find this organism.
 * The relationship between the manefish in genus Carisitus should be explored more. While it does protect the siphonophore from parasites, does it actually do more damage than it prevents by eating away at and steal food from B. conifera? More research may be necessary.
 * The feeding mechanisms of this siphonophore is unclear. More research?
 * The "spaghetti monster" tidbits are interesting but take away from the seriousness of the article. There should be more description on where the name "jewel leek" may have come from. The Chinese translation does not add any new information and seems to be a redundant addition.

This article does do some things well:


 * Many sources are published research papers or include reliable news sources for the most part. Additionally, most of these sources are up to date since deep sea exploration is starting to receive more funding and attention.
 * The reproduction of the organism is explained to the best of our ability as more research needs to be done on the topic.
 * Tone remains consistent throughout the article