User:Beba29x/White Tower (Tower of London)/ScarletFox 13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Beba29x


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?oldid=1122582766&diff=1122814850
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * White Tower (Tower of London)
 * White Tower (Tower of London)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I believe this article has been considerably improved. Much of the article's content has been rewritten and made more concise, making the article easier to read and comprehend. I think the addition of information about the tower's location and the materials it was constructed from are great additions to the article as they are useful pieces of information that are relevant to the article. I have noticed a few small typos that could easily be fixed.

The lead is brief and to the point which is what it should be, However I think it could be expanded on just a little more to give more of an overview of the information within the body of the article. I also find the lead to be a little confusing, although it could easily be fixed with two minor edits.

I would suggest changing the second sentence of the lead paragraph to: "The facility was constructed by William the Conqueror (who was also an architect) during the early 1080s, and subsequently extended, and  . It  served as a royal residence, the strongest point militarily, a prison, and a place of execution." (Turned into two sentences by changing the comma after "subsequently extended" to a period and replacing "and" with "It". Also removing "the strongest point militarily" as it is already part of the following sentence and therefore only makes it confusing to read.)

The sources added to the bibliography appear to be reliable, scholarly articles which add to the article's credibility and makes it appear to be a reliable source of information.