User:Bec1970/Effects of pornography on young people/Jtm20dc Peer Review

General info
Bec1970, Cmk21, Flamenquera
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Effects of pornography on young people

Evaluate the drafted changes
I found the article to be very interesting and full of content. I enjoyed reading the section on pornography consumption affects on the brain. Utilizing statistics in the section helps with the validity of the claims made. The section "Impact on Sexual Activity and Overall Behavior" was very through and informative. I like how the article takes a scientific approach while also talking about the social effects that the addiction can have on an individual

I think one addition that could be made, is the inclusion of a section that talks about pornography addiction, instead of the addiction tab and the associations of addiction. Combining these two sections into one, could be beneficial to the reader while also concise the article to be more informative. Porn addiction wasn't something I was aware was considered an addition until recently and I think including it in the article can help raise awareness on the topic. This in turn could help people realize the signs of addiction and how to properly address it.

I think another addition that could be made is more of an intro section. I know the article itself has one, but including one on the topics discussed that are included as part of our assignment would be useful in guiding readers to their sections.

In conclusion, I think the article and sections included contain valuable and interesting information. With the combination of two sections and a little bit more depth about pornography addiction, I think this article will be great!