User:BeckMarin/Work–family balance in the United States/Jeslyndv Peer Review

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This legislation did little to decrease the wage gap between men and women and did not assist low-income mothers, who continued to work to support their families I would replace "This legislation did little to decrease" to keep neutrality. Writing more information regarding the little decrease or how it failed to assist mothers would help keep the neutral tone of voice. Or making explicit where you found the opinion on the legislation and its outcomes. reinforcing the narrative that only those who were “deserving” were privy to welfare (Pearlmutter and Bartle, "Participants' perceptions” (2003) 159). I would find a way to help make the tone more neutral. Adding the debates surrounding welfare and those ‘deserving’ would hint at the sentence above, without being seen as biased. You could also omit this part, since the next sentence, highlights the inequity behind the legislation, specifically for mothers. The Child and Dependent Care Tax Credit offsets childcare expenses, but it only covers 20 to 35% of costs and is capped at $3,000 for one child and $6,000 for two or more children (Hotz and Wiswall, “Child care and child care policy” (2019) 317). It only offsets income taxes, so families in lower-income brackets receive little money in return. In 2016, only 15% of families even received this subsidy (Hotz and Wiswall, “Child care and child care policy” (2019) 317). Replace only for neutral tone.

Suggested Rewrite: The Child and Dependent Care Tax Credit offsets childcare expenses, covering 20 to 35% of costs and is capped at $3,000 for one child and $6,000 for two or more children (Hotz and Wiswall, “Child care and child care policy” (2019) 317). It offsets income taxes, so families in lower-income brackets receive little money in return. In 2016, only 15% of families even received this subsidy (Hotz and Wiswall, “Child care and child care policy” (2019) 317). Section on Ideology of motherhood:

but one that is reserved to the United States and its conservative nuclear family values. Modeling the previous author would help in creating a more neutral tone on this sentence. Including and indicating the source or the study removes bias. “A study examining the portrayal of mothers in magazines showed that the most popular magazines in the U.S. still continue to promote the traditional role of motherhood while undermining homemakers by portraying them as superficial and negative. Instead, only the Supermom type is portrayed and rarely critiqued.” Framing of childcare

it has been considered as a program to address poverty only, which is one reason why we do not see universal childcare in the United States (Burger, “A social history” (2012) 1007, 1015). Suggested rewrite:  it has been considered as a program to address poverty only, which is one reason {as indicated in Burger} why we do not see universal childcare in the United States (Burger, “A social history” (2012) 1007, 1015). There has been a shift in views on motherhood, with only a minority of Americans supporting the notion that mothers should stay home, but this is yet to be reflected in policy, with most still supporting the belief that middle-class women should take care of their children instead of pursuing a career (Palley and Shdaimah, In our hands (2017) 125). Suggested rewrite:  There has been a shift in views on motherhood, with only a minority of Americans supporting the notion that mothers should stay home, but this is yet to be reflected in policy, with most still supporting the belief that middle-class women should take care of their children instead of pursuing a career {As indicated in the survey or Palley and Shdaimah’s research} (Palley and Shdaimah, In our hands (2017) 125). Final Note: Everything added or new is relevant to the article. The inclusion of gender dynamics within familial households and government policy deepens the article's information by illustrating more up to date information regarding current statistics. The sources also highlight income inequality surrounding government policy and the lack of representation among low-income families.