User:Beckie19/Positive psychology/Ashleyphill Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Beckie19


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 * User:Beckie19/Positive psychology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Positive psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think some of the drafted changes to the lead honestly might be a bit unnecessary. The two back to back sentences about World War 2 feel redundant to me. I would encourage you to ask yourself what is missing from the lead rather than just how can I change it. The two latter portions of content seem like great additions, and they definitely read neutrally. The sources cited are a bit dated, so I would look for something more modern. The overall article is a little bland, so my instinct is to suggest adding photos, but I have no idea how difficult it might be to fit that in. While the content is relevant, it's not filling an empty void of information that is necessary. Great addition - maybe revisit to see if there are any gaps in knowledge to address.