User:Beckie19/Positive psychology/BrookeCarr01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Beckie19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Beckie19/Positive_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Positive psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a great lead to add towards the origin section of the article! References are used well, and the edits are easy to understand. You have also maintained a neutral tone throughout the edits. I am looking forward to seeing the rest of what you may write!

This tiny detail may not matter, but I noticed that some of your references placed throughout the article are inserted just before the sentence’s period while some are inserted after. I have seen these references placed after the ending of the sentence in other articles.

I would also change the placing of one of your commas. The second sentence of your second paragraph says, “In 2006, The Journal of Positive Psychology began to be published and within those 10 years from 1997-2006, many books and articles on positive psychology were published.” I could be wrong, but I would edit the grammar to say: In 2006, The Journal of Positive Psychology began being published, and within those 10 years from 1997 to 2006, many books and articles on positive psychology were published.

I also see many places for wordiness can be taken out. Right now, I know we are just trying to get things written down, but further down the road, this could be a small detail that makes a large difference!

I am also finding plenty of grammatical errors in the original Positive Psychology article. For example, “Basic Concepts” second paragraph is all over the place grammatically. Some of the sentences are not complete thoughts. Some have oddly placed commas that change the meaning of the sentence. It is very difficult to follow.

The “Methodological and Philosophical critiques” section has been flagged for needing additional citations. This could also be an addition you could make to the article if you would like. In the entire section, only one citation is used.

I noticed that the article has very little current or recent research mentioned in the article. Finding some current/recent studies could provide a sense of direction that positive psychology may be taking in the field today. Some studies could be found in looking for research on positive psychology throughout Covid-19. How do we balance positive psychology with healthy fear and reality? Some of these downsides to positive psychology were discussed under “Toxic positivity”, but more can be added to these sections with recent findings.