User:Beekeepergabi/Galapagos penguin/Ayahbear127 Peer Review

General info
Beekeepergabi
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Peanutbutters11

Glitter25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Beekeepergabi/Galapagos_penguin?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Galapagos penguin

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The article is flagged to not have been cited properly, however I feel the lead is well written and comprehensible. The group has decided to connect urbanization to the Galapagos penguins by describing the effects urbanization has on the environment. The lead does have an introductory sentence that concisely describe the article's topic. Since you are adding a major section describing the negative effects urbanization is having on the animal, it can be briefly added to the introduction.

Content

The content is relevant to the topic and does seem up to date and relevant to the topic. I see that you mentioned tourism is also affecting the penguins, but I don't know whether that is due to urbanization or just human interaction.

Tone and Balance

The article does not have any biased language, it seems strictly descriptive which is what I expect from a wikipedia page of an organism. I would suggest to not only describe negative impacts of urbanization but all of the effects on them, both positive and negative. If only negative things are mentioned it may be understood as biased toward a particular position.

Sources and References

The page is not well cited, however the little sources used do seem reliable.

Organization

The content so far is well written and organized into sections. There aren't any grammatical or spelling errors that I've noticed. The sections in the article are major points and ideas of the topic and the prospected sections the group have do seem interesting and beneficial.

Images and Media

The images the article has do enhance my understanding of the topic. They are well captioned and describe the galapagos penguin nicely. The group can show pictures of the effect of human and urbanization on the penguin to enhance their point.