User:Belanelson/Pastoral Neolithic/Calaclacka Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Belanelson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Belanelson/Pastoral Neolithic


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pastoral Neolithic

Lead
There is a lead (yay!) and it reads smoothly and with neutrality. The only thing i would say is that its third paragraph talking about the two tribes could be reorganized to be more succinct.

Content
It is solid.

Tone and Balance
The content is neutral, and I don't think it's particularly biased.

Organization
hunter/gatherers -> hunter-gatherers

"The beginning of the Pastoral Neolithic follows the Late Stone Age around 5000 BP." (move the period here to behind the citation.

Link Lake Turkana upon first use

Link Afro-Saharan first use and Nilo-Saharan

Link Metallurgy

1200BP -> 1200 BP

Cite the end of the third paragraph under stone tool use, evidence is presented without accompanying sources.

If you're going to refer to the Pastoral Neolithic as "PN", establish it in the Lead (it is done so once in the last paragraphs of the page)

Images and Media
N/A

Overall impressions
It is a good article, written well. Yay! Anything not included in this peer review was completed adequately.