User:BelchingFox/Slow violence/Aemoe85 Peer Review

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(Szelinsky)
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So far a very strong start to an article!

I would recommend merging the description and definitions section to create a more cohesive lead section. It should also incorporate/mention the sections that are in the body of the article. Extremely thorough. Maintains a neutral tone for most of it. The sections titled A Case Study from Nova Scotia uses adjectives like "heartbreaking" and "devastating". While the events are truly heartbreaking, that doesn't maintain neutrality.

I'm not sure that you need a criticism section? I think you address the issue with Slow violence and its consequences in other sections. Overall, article is well-written and interesting!

All sources are functional, relevant, and up-to-date. From a variety of different places.

I think it was a great idea to show how people have been counteracting slow violence! Could the BDS movement against Israel be considered a form of slow resistance? Or tree sitters for the tar sands blockade?

- Aerin