User:BelchingFox/Slow violence/Orangetruncate Peer Review

LEAD: I noticed that the words "Slow Violence" are the very first words for the opening three sentences; I imagine this is just because it's still in draft mode but wanted to let you know just in case :)

-I would combine description and definition. "History/interpretation" are implicit to this, I think.

-I would put the sentence "The term slow violence was coined by Rob Nixon in his 2011 book..." before "Rob Nixon states that people lacking resources..."

CONTENT:

-You have a lot of great sources! I would consider focusing on fewer examples and really fleshing them out conceptually; maybe you could combine some of these? For example, I wonder if the segments "Women," "Policing," "Indigenous" and the environmental racism/classism of "Pollution" could be combined into a single segment which just describes who is impacted by Slow Violence (ie the poor/marginalized). I think all the examples and content are great, just might look a little more polished if there were fewer categories.

-I think your segments on Housing/Colonialism/Globalization could then be combined into a different singular segment; maybe one which focuses more on "big picture" or cultural or policy mechanisms through which this violence is inflicted?

-After this, I would add your section on "Slow Resistance," maybe absorb the previous editor's material on Counter-Violence?

-I think "Digital Slow Violence" would be great as its own segment, just like you've got it already! The Nova Scotia case study section could probably just be absorbed into the whole thing, and might benefit from being shortened to prevent the material from becoming tangential. I would keep "Digital Activism" as a separate heading like you've done.

TONE AND BALANCE:

-I didn't notice anything that really stood out as biased. In the opening paragraph, "Slow violence is also closely linked to many instances of Environmental racism..." does sort of sound more like a statement of fact than a theoretical perspective. Although it pains me to call this a "theoretical perspective," I get the impression that not everyone would agree that these things exist. So, maybe you could mention that these concepts are closely related / Environmental Racism is one of the most widely-known types of Slow Violence?

SOURCES AND REFERENCES:

-Everything looks good to me!

ORGANIZATION:

-I pretty much covered all of my suggestions in the "Content" portion.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Great work! Like I said, my biggest point of feedback would be that it might look a little more polished with fewer subcategories. I think one way to do this would be to split it into four parts: 1) Who's impacted, 2) Policy mechanisms which inflict this violence, 3) Slow Resistance, 4) Digital Slow Violence. Editing this was really helpful!! It's gotten me thinking about condensing everything into broad conceptual categories, which I think could be a good way to approach my own article. Your breadth of research is FANTASTIC, by the way. Your bib evinces a ton of work, way to go!!

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