User:Bellaespinoza2021/Category:People with bipolar disorder/Aliahmed.57 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Bellaespinoza2021)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Category:People with bipolar disorder


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bipolar disorder

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Bipolar Disorder
Edited by aliahmed.57


 * I was interested to see how many people had bipolar disorder
 * I think the article was pretty straight forward


 * I would suggest making the first topic sentence a little more clear and concise


 * Sub groups and Categories- I would try adding headings and paragraphs on the people who have bipolar disorder that was they do not have to keep clicking links that take them to a different page.
 * In the topic paragraph you should of introduced the idea of fictional characters who have bipolar disorder or people in books and movies who have had bipolar disorder
 * Try adding pictures because the article would seem dry
 * For the Subcategories try adding more information about what the link takes us too if it wasn't mentioned in the topic paragraph

I think this article was very straight forward there are a few touchups that need to be made with the organization of the links and people who have bipolar disorder but other than that I think it was a good article!