User:Bellamarciano/Insomnia/Mattydubsonly2004 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bella Marciano


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bellamarciano/Insomnia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Insomnia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall the article is compendious and provides an accurate depiction of information pertaining to the symptoms, science, and classifications of Insomnia. I see no bias in any of the information being presented although I do not consider this topic to be one that bias can influence in any alarming way. I also saw that there were multiple links and citations to other third party sources, all of which seemed reputable. I found the information that was being presented was interesting and correlated to the topic being discussed. I thought that the fact that the brain can become confused if one does too many activities too often in bed. I would maybe try and add a section about the detriments of the condition and if any behaviors can be adapted to decrease the potency and/or existence of the disorder. I think this section definitely has some components of the original article but the topics being discussed will inevitably mention commonalities. Overall the review was better than mine so I can't say much