User:Bellaruby12/Environmental issues in New York City/Jeanius1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bellaruby12, Anaeradze,and Gcuties


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bellaruby12/Environmental_issues_in_New_York_City?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental issues in New York City
 * Environmental issues in New York City

Evaluate the drafted changes
**Based on the sandbox and the current article.

* The lead section is not being improve to reflect the new contents that being added.

* The content is relevant to the topic, but in the "Air pollution exposure and risk of violent behavior" section in the article, I would suggest to add a source that can explain how the statistics of how air pollution affect the behavior of someone to be more aggressive, like an article that comparing crime rates and pollution level from one time period to another, to see if there's a correlation.

-In the pest section I think you need a source that can help you back up what you said about the quantity of rats per colony and to add to this section, you can talk about the impact of rats on human life in the subway or you can mention about the rats that were on the news that are in fast food restaurant in NYC. (something related to NYC).

-You need more contents besides talking about pest, noise and air pollution.

- In the noise pollution, you need to explain a bit more. Is there studies that being made that shows noise in the city cause heart disease when compare to the country-side or the rural environment?

* Tone and Balance: when taking about the homeless and garbage, it seem like more of a persuasive statement, but by re-write it, and focus on the facts about these two factors, I think it can great topic to be focused on.

* Source and references: The sources that provided was written by diverse author, but some of the sources need a date check.

* Organization: The content that was added has minor grammatical error--> Ex: in the "Air pollution exposure and risk of violent behavior," I would write it as such: (Air pollution has been linked to violent behavior. A 2019 study reported emerging evidence that air pollution causes aggressive or impulsive reactions in people. The study was designed to estimate the change in violent and nonviolent criminal behavior risk associated with short-term air pollution in U.S. counties. The study used daily monitoring data for ozone from EPA and Federal Bureau of Investigation crime data from 2002 to 2013. The study evaluated the exposure-response relation and assessed differences in risk by community characteristics of poverty, urbanicity, race, and age. The findings suggest that even a slight increase in air pollution can result in violent behavior, regardless of the community type.)

* Images and Media: I didn't see any images added when going through the article's history.

* Overall, I think the topics chosen for this article are significant, you guys need to refine them a bit more and add more information if possible to make it more complete, but besides that, you guys are on your way; good job.