User:BelleKahlua/Evolution of the Human Oral Microbiome/Lsmith44 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BelleKahlua


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BelleKahlua/Evolution_of_the_Human_Oral_Microbiome/Lsmith44_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I liked how concise yet detailed the lead section was. It had just enough information there to let the reader know what was going on without inundating them. There was an effective neutral language going on throughout this article and it read well. I thought the author did a good job of picking out their sections and I really liked the first section after the lead that gave us enough background to understand the article going forward. I think if the author had time then perhaps adding a picture or two in their article would enhance the reader's understanding even more. Plus it seems to fit the Wikipedia standard pretty well, I don't know that I've come across a Wikipedia article without a picture. I think even a simple picture of a mouth would add a lot of pizzazz. Overall, I thought this was a strong article and it helped me learn something new about oral microbiomes, which I think is our goal as we write these articles. Good job!