User:Belleevans/Mary E. Peabody/Eb5406a Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Belleevans, Chloe McKeown, and Hayes.maddy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Belleevans/Mary E. Peabody


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * There is not another version of the article.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead introduces the topic and the basic information about Mary E. Peabody. It does not include a brief description of each of the article's major sections, but is very concise.

Content:

All of the content is relevant and up to date. I do not think you are missing any information or that there is content that does not belong.

Tone:

I think that the use of adjectives and adverbs does help paint a picture, but should be used cautiously as there were some times in the article where I thought that the tone could be more neutral. For example, when you said "finally brought much needed attention to" or other descriptive adjectives such as "determined, powerful, unique, or fearless". Additionally, I think that in the Legacy section the last two sentences are helpful to show her impact, but could be rephrased so that it is not trying to persuade the reader, especially because of the word "should".

Sources and References:

I do not think that you need to do in text citations, only the reference numbers and footnotes. Other than that, the sources are from reliable organizations like the New York Times, NPR, and the Civil Rights Library. The links do work!

Organization:  The content is organized well and the headings break down the major sections. The only spelling error I noticed was very minor in "personal life", where it should be "traditional" rather than "tradition". Other than that no issues!

Images and Media:

The images are well captioned and help the reader understand the News section. I cannot see the second image because on my page it says it was removed due to copyright.

"For New Articles Only"

It does follow the Wiki notability requirements of 2-3 reliable secondary sources. It also follows the same pattern with section headings and links to related articles.

Overall Impressions:

Hello everyone! I think you did a really great job of incorporating a lot of detailed information about Mary E. Peabody, and depicting all parts of her life. My main suggestion is watching out for those adjectives, as it can seem more like a story about her rather than a neutral article. Other than that, I learned a lot of new information about her and enjoyed reading it!