User:Bellestar12/Disease informatics/CarpenterAnt Peer Review

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This is a really excellent contribution to an article that clearly needs a significant update.

The content of Predicting Disease Outbreaks is good, but there are some stylistic changes that may be appropriate:

"Time is of the essence when attempting to predict possible outbreaks..."

The phrase 'of the essence' is a little too stylistic, i.e. demonstrates too much 'voice.' I suggest rewording the phrase to something like 'Due to the time-sensitivity in predicting possible outbreaks,' or 'Due to the urgency required in predicting possible outbreaks...'.

"However, due to the nature of office visit notes using abbreviations and common human spelling errors, the data must undergo a thorough cleaning before it is eligible to be used..."

This passage reads a little out of place in the "Predicting Disease Outbreaks" section. It feels like a very particular detail that might be appropriate in a "methodolgy" section, but not so much in a section geared toward describing the broad role of disease informatics in predicting outbreaks.

"Common other sources combined with those mentioned above are..."

I suggest changing this to something like "Other important sources include the following:"

Reply to CarpenterAnt Review:
Thank you for your suggestions. They are super helpful, I will be following your advice on stylization and the small changes you recommended. Thanks so much!