User:Bellis24/Deaf education/Plloren Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Beebedell, Bellis24, Cbaer9, Dognast


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Bellis24/Deaf_education&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deaf education

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Lead section - I would provide information regarding the language modality that is used when taught in a Deaf Education setting.
 * Identifying deaf students section - There is a misconnection with the data regarding the lack of technology for screening hearing loss or deafness and the topic of language deprivation. It would be nice to see that there is a tie within those topics. Moreover, although I agree that there are negative results and ties to language deprivation. I think it would be helpful to add the other side of the story; meaning that although there are a lot of people who are language deprived, they are NOT doomed for life. Having access to a natural language as soon as possible is imperative. There are a few resources our there that talk about language deprived adult learners that might help you with this.
 * Individual needs section - Once again I would clarify what a "regular" class is? Is it a mainstream setting? Is it a hearing classroom/hearing environment?
 * Australia section - I would clarify what "regular" English means. Is it referring to spoken English or a standardized version of English?
 * General suggestions - As for the sections of Nigerian section, I can tell that you did some research. It is definitely important to know how these schools formed and the legacy of the people who started them. I also noticed the new section of the Australian deaf education section. That is a new section to the article, good addition.
 * Overall I think there are many things to be changed an added to the Deaf Education article. I noticed in your draft that you have only added things to Nigerian and Australian Education section. I would suggest to go back to the start of your article and start with that. Thus the information provided in the former sections are intrinsically important to this topic. Later on, adding to each particular topic would be ideal of course.
 * I'm not sure what else this team is planning on changing but there is a lot to do for sure. I hope you understand my suggestions and if not. Feel free to reach out!
 * Overall I think there are many things to be changed an added to the Deaf Education article. I noticed in your draft that you have only added things to Nigerian and Australian Education section. I would suggest to go back to the start of your article and start with that. Thus the information provided in the former sections are intrinsically important to this topic. Later on, adding to each particular topic would be ideal of course.
 * I'm not sure what else this team is planning on changing but there is a lot to do for sure. I hope you understand my suggestions and if not. Feel free to reach out!