User:Bellis24/Deaf education/Tooth21 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bellis24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bellis24/Deaf education
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deaf education

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I support the idea of adding language modality seen in Deaf Education in the lead section. It could be used as an example for "accessible settings" as mentioned in the current version of the article. In addition to adding the language modality, I suggest mentioning deaf schools, mainstream programs, and other educational programs that serves to the deaf students in the United States. It does describe more in detail later on in the article but it would be nice to mention the educational settings in the lead.

 Content 

The current version of the article needs expanding on the "Issues" and "National Approaches." I highly suggest the group to focus on these sections rather than the history in Nigeria, Australia, and Germany. There was no prior mention of Australia nor Germany in the article. The countries should have its own respective article expanding more on their deaf education in their country. The current version is very based on the United States deaf education. The deaf education in the United States have it own history that is influenced by France. I am unsure what the group wants to expand on the "History" section. The intention is not clear yet.

 Sources and References 

The sources needs some fixing. If it did not automatically cite, I suggest searching for another reputable source. For Wikipedia, it is standard practice to have the link and boost the notability of your article. I am concerned with some of the sources, some are perspectives of the deaf education. It is important we find sources that are neutral.

 Organization 

I know this is still in the draft process, I suggest providing readers with some lead of where you are going with the article. This will help the reader to better understand the purpose of the article. The writing style, grammar, and spelling is clear.

 Overall Impressions 

Just like my article, it is still a work in progress! I look forward to the final version of this article. The content of the article can be improved with:

-Finding credible sources that is neutral and reputable and citing when appropriate

-Find a clear direction where you want to take this article