User:Bellis24/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Audism

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article to evaluate due to the topic of audism being greatly important, but not often defined or seen in my personal life.

Evaluate the article
A well made article which clearly and effectively defines the term, while still having flaws. Below are my suggestions.

• The lead of this article is brief, but well put as it offers a definition for the term "audism", an origin for the term, and when it gained popularity. Additionally, mentioning the terms evolution from attitudes and actions to the overall oppression of deaf people gave insight on the terms usability.

• Formatting

- I enjoy how the article flows from the definition of "audism" into the "types of audism" and ways in which it can be expressed.

• I would have prefered to have the "origins of audism" be explained before the "history of audism", but this ultimately is not too necessary to change.

• Content

- The content in the section titled "Audism in the legal system", did however have unnecessary information. The case of Magdiel Sanches is indeed a tragic case of police being under educated on dealing with deaf persons, but it seems to focus more on language access than audism (Personally, I feel like better case examples of audism could be found). Additionally, when referring to deaf women having higher domestic assault rates, the statistics should be clearly compared and not claimed without numerical reference to the values. The rest of the content however is supportive, topical, and up-to-date.

• Tone and Balance

- The article does a good job of maintaining a neutral position and avoiding biased statements. The article is able to provide some sources for information given and uses non-charged words when discussing the topic.

• Sources and References

- Sadly, the article does a poor job at citing some important details both in the document and in the reference portion. Throughout the article there are citation links stating "citation needed" because a fact is stated without evidence. Additionally, in the reference portion of the article references such as 17 and 18 appear to only be cited as a readings title and cannot be easily accessed by those looking to do research of their own.

• Talk Section

- The article has a talk section with dates from 2006 to 2018 and has made great improvements over this time. This section seems to be adamant on helping educating each-other and others on audism and the content of the article.

• Overall Impression

- I believe this is an incredibly important wikipage that could use some revisions and additional sources. I believe the content is strong however, it fails to put considerable emphasis on the audism in the educational system. The topic of audism expressed within the educational system should be better explained using both past and present examples. I believe that the current content is not bad, but I believe that the current content alone is incapable of covering an important topic as such. Through utilizing more citations, the additional of audism in an educational sense, and by revamping the legal section with a more topical case the article could be vastly improved.

- Bellis24