User:Benediktusrayo/Phenome-wide association study/Bmaghen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rayo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Benediktusrayo/Phenome-wide_association_study?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Phenome-wide association study

Evaluate the drafted changes
“ICD9 containts” typo: contains

Overall, well done to explain the essential elements of the methods.

Plietropy Study:

Good job introducing plietropy. Good job introducing the Pendergrass study

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So it seems like u did a good job summarizing this study and its important points. I think it is kind of tough for me to comment on the content which you went over because I am not familiar with the study, however I will say that reading it was a little difficult because it reads almost like a list of notes on the study. Maybe try to use more historical/contextual elements and writers voice to have it read a little easier. Understanding that you’re basically just explaining studies, it makes sense that it reads this way, so don’t sweat it.