User:Benjamin Charles Baird/Off-speed pitch/Hmk0110 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Benjamin Charles Baird
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Benjamin Charles Baird/Off-speed pitch

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? The lead was not updated but more information was added in the main paragraph.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? no
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?overall yes

Lead evaluation
Overall the lead seems good. I think it can be helpful to add on to the sentence of "The specific goals of off-speed pitches may vary, but in general they are used to disrupt the batter's timing.." like adding the different methods besides disrupting timing ie) how the late cutting actions in a slider disrupts a batters hitting point?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?no
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?no
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?yes
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work? yes

Sources and references evaluation
I think it can be helpful to look in at pitching books and how specific pitchers describe off-speed pitches.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
It was good to read overall. I think defiantly adding a visual element that shows the different trajectories of the off-speed pitches would help readers to understand the content. Perhaps adding details of how the movement of the off-speed pitches tricking hitters would be an idea that can be added to the article.