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7/22/2020 Editing and citation exercise
Text to display in "I'm Not Scared" article: It is the third novel published by Ammaniti.

7/16/2020 Evaluation exercise using guide for writing biographies - Maria Licciard
What makes this person notable?

Maria Licciardi is the boss of one of the most important criminal gangs (clans) in the Camorra (Neapolitan Mafia). She has ordered many killings and has been a fugitive and prisoner of the law.

Is the article neutral?

The article is neutral in that it does not romanticize the criminal career of this organized crime boss.

Is the lead section clear and concise?

Yes, it is concise and clear. It only covers Licciardi's life until 2001; it should also cover her arrest and release in the past decades in a concise way.

Is the tone of the article impersonal?

No. There are many phrases that use verbs like "prefer" & "feel" that 1) do not have adequate sourcing; and 2) this is an improper way of writing a biography

Are the sources and citations reliable?

No. The phrases that are too personalized do not have sourcing. Some links to sources do not work anymore., which is a major problem because these sources are used to reinforce major swathes of the Personality and Fugitive sections

Organization:

'''Is the article organized like so? Lead section. • Early life: Context for childhood, hometown, and early experiences relevant to their later careers. • Career, actions, or defining experiences, provided chronologically and with historical context. • Legacy: Major contributions to their fields. • Publications or other works'''.

Yes, it is organized chronologically, starting from the background of Licciardi's family history, her rise to power, criminal activities, time as a fugitive, prison sentence and release. Obviously she does not have publications or other works, and it is still unclear what her legacy in the organized crime context of Naples will be because she was only just recently released from prison.

7/15/2020 Maria Licciardi evaluation

 * Name of article: (link) Maria Licciardi
 * Briefly describe why you have chosen this article to evaluate. It contains inaccurate language and lacks sources to back up some claims.

Lead
Guiding questions


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes,
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No, it does not.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Yes, it includes Licciardi's nicknames, which do not appear in the body of the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is concise.

Lead evaluation (write out your thoughts here)
It is adequately concise; however, it should introduce more of the key topics of the article.

Content
Guiding questions


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic? The content covers Licciardi's life and career as a Camorrista (gangster), but some sentences are thrown in without citations and do not add much to her biography.
 * Is the content up-to-date? Mostly yes, the latest news about Licciardi occurred in July 2019, which is the date of the latest source cited, but there are news articles from December 2019 and early 2020 about her that are not included in the article.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? The sentence " local parish priest once reportedly said that the "people have the culture of the Camorra in their bones." does not belong as it is unsourced. There are other examples of unsourced material that should not appear.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions


 * Is the article neutral? Not really; the language used is informal, often too personal and portrays people in certain neighborhoods of Naples as criminals.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Yes, see the above line.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Not necessarily; this is not the main problem with the article.
 * Does the article attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? Not exactly; the article is not written carefully to preserve objectivity, but it does not try to persuade.

Tone and balance evaluation (write out your thoughts here)
Needs major improvement.

Sources and References
Guiding questions


 * Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Most are backed up by news articles, which, in the field of organized crime and the Camorra, are often the only sources of information available to the public.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes they reflect the available literature.
 * Are the sources current? They are mostly current. There are more recent news articles that cover some aspects that could be developed further in the Wikipedia article.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes.

Organization
Guiding questions


 * Is the article well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? It is concise and easy to read.
 * Does the article have any grammatical or spelling errors? No; it should be written with less personalized language, such as the verbs "feel", "prefer", etc.
 * Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, it is well-organized.

Images and Media
Guiding questions


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? There is just one image of Maria Licciardi; there should be more mugshots available to post in the article.
 * Are images well-captioned? The image has a good caption.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? No, the image is copyrighted and unlicensed.
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? No; since there is just one image, there is no visual relief to the article.

Images and media evaluation (write out your thoughts here)
Inadequate image licensing, and there should be more images.

Checking the talk page
Guiding questions


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? There are no conversations; just one user has posted and no other editors have responded.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? It is rated C-class and is part of WikiProjects on Italy, Organized Crime, Women, Crime and Criminal Biography.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

Talk page evaluation (write out your thoughts here)
No discourse; there should be more discussions going on.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions


 * What is the article's overall status? It needs improvement.
 * What are the article's strengths? It gives good background on Licciardi's work as boss of her clan and her rise to power.
 * How can the article be improved? The tone and sources of the articles must be improved.
 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed? Under-developed

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