User:Berns6/Medieval English Architecture/Kj3gomez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Berns6


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Berns6/Medieval_English_Architecture?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really liked the information of the architectural symbolism in the section about religious architecture because I think it is important to understand the changes in the design of churches and monasteries. I also liked the section about military architecture and the strategic purposes and influence of the growth of cities. I think the information in the article itself was good, but I was mostly distracted by grammatical errors or awkward phrasing of a lot of the sentences or sentences I thought could be brought together to make a more concise point. I found a lot of the sentences began with "This" so I often got distracted or lost focus in what the information was trying to convey. I recognized the information Dr. Jasper discussed in class but thought it was a little vague. I saw the point you were making because of my prior knowledge but I think other readers might not see the larger context that is trying to be conveyed. think my biggest suggestion would to be reading the article out loud to yourself so it is easier to notice any redundancy or sentences that could become stronger. The only question I had in terms of information was how were these such vast amounts of architectural structures forming and who was funding them financially?