User:BerrySun/Valery Bykovsky/Ijggrz Peer Review

Ijggrz Peer Review Of Valery Bykovsky
1) The information is good to add in, but adding in the part about his sister Margarita seemed relatively unimportant as it was just there and hardly written on. I'm not sure if there is any other information that could be added about her that would make her more important in the article but maybe there is a story about her that could be added in.

I'm not sure that the inclusion of his callsign was necessarily important, but it is a cool fact to know and I'm wondering if there was a reason for the sign or not. The part about him being in the communist party was accidentally included twice, and the part of him being promoted to colonel was extremely short, and I'm wondering if there is more to that story in between Vostok 5 and 1966.

Overall, I think the additions made are very educational and well needed information that ties this article together. I think that the quick and small sentences can be a bit distracting for myself just cause then I wonder why the information is so short, and whether or not we have any more information about him in that time. But I think that what has been added is great information to be included in this article.

2) The article itself is neutral as well as the additions, there are no claims to anything that leans to any conclusions other than what is already known.

3-6) I don't think any of the views are being over or underrepresented or stated, I think they are included enough times in the article to be used and then left alone so that the reader can make their own conclusions and hold onto the information that they have read. The citations work and are correctly used for the facts and claims that are being made in the article.

Overall, I think that this is a good article and many great additions have been made. There are few things that I would change and I can't wait to see the final product.

BerrySun's Review Response
For 1), I didn't add that. It is just there, so you know the context of the additions I made. I can maybe make the wording better, but I don't nessesarily remove someone else's addition.

For 2), I did my best to make my additions as neutral as possible.

For 3-6) I did my best to cite all of my sources well, but hopefully Jeppi2023 will update his werid source (Source 2 in our draft). It's link is incorrect, and the source is generally a different topic than the one in the sentence.

Thanks for your review.

Jeppi2023 Peer review response
1) Definitely appreciate all the feedback.  And will move the information to better location so it is better streamlined for the reader and not so random.

2) We definitely tried to add information to this wiki page while remaining neutral. But I definitely agree there is room to add more information and making it a more comprehensive page.