User:BerrySun/Valery Bykovsky/Sitekm2972 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BerrySun


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BerrySun/Valery Bykovsky


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Valery Bykovsky

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Valery Bykovsky article itself is rated a few different ways for importance for different projects but it seems to be at a Start class in general. I can tell that the main article doesn't have much meat and bones to it as some other articles. The Lead section seems to be quite small, and a lot of the information gets introduced in the Early life and career section. That is something that could be worked on/added. I don't exactly know what the groups plan is to work on for the article, I can tell that they have added bits and pieces of information here and there about different timeframes of training or deaths. I would be curious to know what other information is being planned to add.

I can see that the changes that have been made have been neutral and have reliable sources, which is good! I noticed some information or structure that was in the O.G article that I would change if working on this one. For example, with-in the "Cosmonaut career" section, some of the paragraphs start with He and with mention of so many other people (I know the article is about Valery) it might be a little confusing for readers (me) to follow who the article is talking about.

The talk page for the article shows that BerrySun has said what they are planning on changing or adding to the article and also showed what they removed too. Nice! I think there are an okay amount of citations for the article originally without diving into them, but there could be more for some of the spots where there is only one citation for a whole paragraph. And BerrySun or group has stated what they plan to do with their sources in their bibliography so that's good!

BerrySun's Review Response
For information planned to be added, I have just been searching through newspapers and articles to see if there is new information in any of the material. I havn't really been looking for anything specific yet. Usually when I find anything new, I add it unless it is a bad source.

I'll make sure to make another pass by for my wording, to make sure it works with the rest of the article, and that it doesn't get confusing.

Appreciate the noticing of my Bibliography. I like to add to that when I obtain a good new source with new information about Valery Bykovsky in it.

Jeppi2023 Peer Review response
Thanks for the great feedback Mason. I do agree there is a lot more information that can be added and with the help of my co-contributor BerrySun I’m sure we can fill some of those information gaps. I do like your point about the other names that might be confusing, a possible solution to this to highlight Valery’s name when it appears in order to catch the readers eye. We do plan on adding more details about his career and information post-career as well. Thank you again for your insightful comments and for taking the time to help us out.