User:Berserkz/Beher (god)/Josage18 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Berserkz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Berserkz/Beher (god)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beher (god)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The sandbox draft of Berserkz's article has not received much work. The 'lead' of the article is exactly the same as it is on the current article. The current article has a reference in the lead that is not carried over into the sandbox article.

In the article body, Berserkz starts with: "Beher is the god of the land and probably of the sea (Arab, bahr).", the word probably is used again in another sentence further into the article body. I would avoid using the word 'probably' because it makes this statement, and others, sound unsure and that there hasn't been a lot of research completed on the topic. Additionally, the end of the first sentence contains what appears to be an alternative spelling for 'Beher'. If that is the case, I would relocate that directly behind the first use of 'Beher' in the sentence so readers are aware that it is an alternative spelling.

The citation is there, but there seems to be an error with it. This is the error code:

- :   has extra text (help)

I am not sure how to correct that, so I would ask our Professor for help with it.

Overall, the current article only contains the lead and a single reference, so I would say that Berserkz article is an improvement from the current, but it still needs a lot amount of work.