User:Bert Dinkles/Hogwarts/TheRevenantTwo Peer Review

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Bert Dinkles
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I think this student does a good job at identifying details that are bogging down the article. Random trivia can be its own section of the article. The section describing houses mainly focuses on physical descriptions, so I agree that including anecdotes and fun facts negatively impacts the focus of the article. I agree that an iconic shot of the Hogwarts castle from the films would be a better picture for the article. It's underwhelming to see a picture that clearly shows that it is a movie set, the point of a movie set is to make the environment seem real so a frame from the actual movie would objectively look better. There is definitely no need to state the age-range at the beginning if it is addressed later in the article. "There is not a reference to Hogwarts being a setting for the movies, only for the book series. This detail would make sense, considering the first photo and “First appearance” are connected to the films" does not really make sense as it would be assumed that the setting for the book would be the same in the film adaptation.

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