User:Beyzia/LEED/Jelotan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Beyzia - Kezia


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Beyzia/LEED?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LEED
 * LEED

Evaluate the drafted changes
It seems right now the changes are leading into the next paragraph of The Crystal. I think picking this article is very interesting as it's very fact dense so there are potentially many things to be changed and easy ways to improve and fact check the existing article. That being said I would be out of my depth so I'm interested to see what you do with article going forward!

Evaluate the drafted changes II
There is sustainable research and writing into getting the sandbox into where it is now. As sated before I don't have any specific knowledge to be able to fact check the information on the sandbox, though looking at each article it seems that each is easily assessable and contains the relevant information. I though wonder if source 4 coming from the firm that worked on the project might be a bit biased?

Other than that I see that rest of the article is all new information than the existing article, I think adding more the articles makes sense as "notable certifications" could include many more things, you're also adding examples from countries that don't get talked about much in general. The latter part of the articles starts to get into topics that don't fit into the same section as the beginning paragraph. I think the information provided there is good though, looking at the article it's under a different section. I'm a bit confused on whether the sand box is improvements to a few parts of the article all over of this is a major rewrite rearranging information. Either way you've done lots of good work, keep it up!