User:Bflx 11/Alphonzo Terrell/JenniGump Peer Review

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User:Anthonyn256
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 * User:Anthonyn256/Alphonzo Terrell - Wikipedia
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Lead
Lead sounds a bit overly detailed try removing this sentence and adding it into career "Terrell also known as "Phonz" was let go during the purchase of Twitter by Elon Musk. After Terrell was let go from Twitter."

Try adding: After a previous employer laid him off, Terrell created a social media platform known as "Spill".

citations are needed after every sentence

minor grammatical errors.

College life
"Terrell was a student at Columbia University in New York where he was interested in basketball." could be written

"Terrell studied and played basketball at Columbia University in New York.

Add citations after every sentence

Career
"Terrell jump on the opportunity after just being let go from Twitter." Try "Terrell seized the opportunity just after being laid off at Twitter.

Awards & nominations
no bullets

complete sentences explaining the reason and citations after every sentence.

Information box
change name from Alphonzo Tarrell to Alphonzo Terrell