User:Bfoley51/Undiscovered Country (Comic)/Oliviaabad Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bfoley51


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Bfoley51/Undiscovered Country (Comic)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

You have a good lead, very concise. I suggest starting a new line at your third sentence starting with “The series depicts…” Also do you have sources for all of this info? If so, I would add in-text citations. It describes the article’s topic but I just don’t see too much of a connection between the lead and the article’s major sections, so I would make sure to do that.

Content

Content looks good to me.

Tone and balance

Everything added is neutral.

Sources and references

As I said in the lead, I would just make sure you’re adding in-text citations for everything. Your sources look good and are current, but I would try to look for something on the SFSU database (I found one solid one if you search “undiscovered country” comic.. it should show up right at the top) just so that you can have a more reliable source.

Organization

Article is well-organized.

Images and media

no images/media.

New article feedback

I think if you add that source from the SFSU library database, that will help it meet wiki’s notability requirements. It looks good like it follows the patterns of similar articles, I would just make sure to add info in the Publication History section and the Reception section.

overal impressions

This is a really good start! If you can find more info from more reliable sources, then I think it could be even stronger.