User:Bgrampp8/sandbox

I have assigned myself the article "hegemonic masculinity". I plan to use my experience in sociology to help improve this article. The top of the page said it had some issues with sources so I can go through and help with that, as well as reviewing the ideas and making the overall page more aesthetically pleasing.

http://jmm.sagepub.com/content/early/2012/01/03/1097184X11428384.abstract

http://jmm.sagepub.com/content/early/2012/03/13/1097184X12438001.abstract

http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/01425690120102836

This is a lengthy article, so I've decided to just focus on the subheading "Lifespan Development". There are some pieces that don't quite fit under their age category, and some pieces missing, so I will attempt to fix some of those. One specific instance is in the Early Childhood section, there is a paragraph about sports and football. I do not think that necessarily falls under 'early childhood', but maybe adolescence or a different, older age group. Some pieces can just easily be moved to other sections. Under adolescence, there is a movie discussed and there is no citation, so I can either remove that sentence or find a suitable citation for it. This section also goes up to adolescence, so I could try to find some more information about masculinity in adulthood and add it in to make this section more complete. Also near the end of the section there is either a paragraph that is a quote missing quotation marks or an objective, opinion piece, which needs to be removed or fixed.

Working more on my draft/getting more specific. In the 1st paragraph of 'Early Childhood', I'd like to add a sentence near the end where it talks about males using toys and observing others. I believe this sentence should be inclusive for females too, so I would change the sentence to "...behavior of boys and girls in early childhood. Gender roles are also reinforced by observing older boys and girls, authority figures, and parents." I thought this edit necessary because even though this article is about masculinity, the previous author mentions both boys and girls earlier in the paragraph, so I am trying to make it consistent. The last two paragraphs in 'Early Childhood' do not fit in that category, for they talk about sports and literature. I do not usually associate young children (in preschool) with being skilled at reading or football, so I will look for a place to move hose paragraphs to. The section about football would fit perfectly under the 1st paragraph in 'Middle Childhood'. There are many sources discussed in 'Adolescence' that are not cited, so I will go ahead and try to find some citations for those. For The Celluloid Closet, http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0112651/. The rest of that paragraph is a hot mess, so I will either delete it or try to revise it so that there are citable sources. For Tough Guise: Violence, Media & the Crisis in Masculinity, http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1139643/. There also needs to be quotation marks around the quote taken from that movie, and correct formatting applied.

10/15-Draft for what I intend to fix/add: I've decided against adding in my sentence that also includes girls. After reading it over, I just don't think it fits. I will try to cut and paste the paragraph about football from 'Early Childhood' to right after the first paragraph in 'Middle Childhood'. It will fit perfectly there because the last sentence references athletic ability. I think the paragraph about reading in 'Early Childhood' will stay where it is. I will also add citations for the two movies mentioned in this subheading; Celluloid Closet and Tough Guise. The quote used for 'Tough Guise' needs quotation marks and a citation, so it would look a little something like this:

In Jackson Katz’ film Tough Guise: Violence, Media & the Crisis in Masculinity, he explains: "We can’t show any emotion except anger. We can’t think too much or seem too intelligent. We can’t back down when someone disrespects us. We have to show we’re tough enough to inflict physical pain and take it in turn. We’re supposed to be sexually aggressive with women. And then we’re taught that if we step out of this box, we risk being seen as soft, weak, feminine, or gay".

The paragraph that begins talking about Celluloid Closet is confusing because it references the movie once and then goes on to talk about an uncited and unspecific article. That part of the paragraph should be deleted, as I think it will be impossible to track down what the person who wrote that sentence is trying to reference. Also the title of the movie should be linked to it's corresponding Wikipedia article, in case readers want to know more. With that paragraph being reduced to one sentence, the information from Tough Guise could be combined there to make one paragraph about media representation. While this will all be interesting, I am not sure if it really fits under 'Adolescence' and 'Lifespan Development'. Maybe I can add a new subheading for media representation of men and give it a kick start with the info I'd take from 'adolescence' and then leave it for more Wikipedia Users to edit.

So that could look something like this:

Media Representation
The 1995 documentary The Celluloid Closet discusses the depictions of homosexuals throughout film history. This film explores gay representation in the media, pointing out that a male perceived as ‘un-masculine’ was therefore a ‘sissy,’ or not a true man. In Jackson Katz’s film Tough Guise: Violence, Media & the Crisis in Masculinity, he explains: "We can’t show any emotion except anger. We can’t think too much or seem too intelligent. We can’t back down when someone disrespects us. We have to show we’re tough enough to inflict physical pain and take it in turn. We’re supposed to be sexually aggressive with women. And then we’re taught that if we step out of this box, we risk being seen as soft, weak, feminine, or gay".