User:Bherrin3/William Pulgram/Lemonlime2020 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

bherrin3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * William Pulgram
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * William Pulgram

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead to this article is written really good. It flows nicely and highlights the major things in his life without going too much into detail, making it a good start to the article. The overall organization of the categories is nice like education, life and career, book. It divides the information better and easier to read so it's not a massive amount of paragraphs. The structure of these categories is almost like a timeline which makes it easy to follow. I would consider possibly adding photographs of himself, family, or work. It provides something visual to look at. The overall tone is balanced and neutral, which is good. There wasn't any grammatical, punctuation, or spelling errors. The sources were up to date and cited correctly; links also worked. Overall the article is written very good and structures/organized. I would consider researching a few of his projects and writing a blurb about that particular one. His work is currently listed, but I think it needs to go a bit more in depth with who he worked with, materiality, and the purpose of the project. Overall really good!