User:BigAndLarge/Show Me the Body/Gkc1021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BigAndLarge, 275betheteam


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BigAndLarge/Show Me the Body


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Show Me the Body

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the history breakdown and think that the headings/categories that you guys chose to add are essential to the understanding of the group. I think the segments of information (they're quotes I'm assuming) chosen for each section are representative of the major points. Obviously, rewording, restructuring, and citing are things that need to eventually be done, but I think this is a good start to drafting. I noticed that the original article lists the former and current members and in the history section, you touch on why Millman left the band. Perhaps you could also include why Cohen-Corbett left, as he is another former member. Further, another addition could be how/why new members (i.e., Jackieboy) joined the band (contingent on being able to find said information of course). Tone wise, it seems to be neutral (but again, it's hard to fully judge considering some things are quoted). Lastly, I think photos would enhance the page.