User:BigAndLarge/Show Me the Body/Practicingtoedit Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dan and Charlie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BigAndLarge/Show Me the Body


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Show Me the Body

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how you have subheadings that categorize the bands history into years, making it easier for the reader to jump to the point of their interest. Comparing the original version of this wikipedia article to yours shows a drastic difference, one that includes much more information and shows an understanding of the sources used and the band, themselves. The one thing that you could add would be a few images, one at the beginning of the article, and then a few along the way maybe showing their transformation as a band. Also, like many other wikis about bands, maybe write the names of the members under the photo as well as the years active, associated acts, other names, etc. I was also thinking it could be interesting to talk about the band members individually under the collaborators and list their awards as well. Other than that, it's a significant improvement from the original article that was posted and your version explains a lot more about the band. The content seemed neutral with no bias towards anything but rather just information about the band. In terms of sources, I didn't see any but its just the first draft, ours barely had sources linked as well. It's very well written, I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors so that's definitely a plus.