User:Big Daddy Lava Tornado/1999 Luzon earthquake/Tjordan15 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Big Daddy Lava Tornado, Geol200 NB, Sktalwar


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Big%20Daddy%20Lava%20Tornado/1999_Luzon_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1999 Luzon earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Looking at what your group intends to add to the article, I think this is a great start since you are basically writing the article yourselves. The article is just the lead section. I like that you intend to include how the earthquake effected the political climate, the countryside and the local population. That way everyone will be represented and the article won't come off as biased. Since the group plans to include how the people were affected and what it was like trying to adjust to life afterward, it might be beneficial to find info on the earthquake and damage affecting farming and food supply if possible.

I would recommend adding more photos possibly of the damage that was dealt to the area. It seems like you all have a good start to the amount of sources you plan to add. All of the plans for addition is relevant to the topic so I wouldn't recommend taking anything out. Lastly, I would start to consider how you plan to organize the info within sections because you are basically doing the article from scratch. I would recommend listing the sections you want to add and the putting your plans and info you have already complied underneath them. Overall I think it is a really good start and would be very beneficial to the lacking article.