User:Billycoolgirl/Crime fiction/Kyliehagarty0 Peer Review

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Billycoolgirl
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Billycoolgirl/Crime fiction
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Crime fiction

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) Your essay has a lot of different elements that keep my attention, such as the structure of your essay. There are various distinct body paragraphs, and each section has a specific topic or country; this makes it easier to follow and understand different arguments. There are also diverse perspectives that you put in your essay. Your report goes down into the history and development of crime fiction in countries such as Italy, Indonesia, Japan, Sweden, and Australia. These diverse perspectives highlight the unique cultural influences that shaped the genre in various regions. Also, your essay incorporates a lot of sources that showcase a well-researched piece. Lastly, throughout the report, there’s a recurring theme of the evolution of crime fiction within different cultures. For instance, Sweden’s journey from its first-generation writers to modern-day trilogy formats or Australia’s literary journey post the “Traditional Market Agreement.”


 * 1) There are multiple different strengths in your report that have areas of potential. For example, your writing has a clear structure and organization. Your article makes it easy to read because it is clear. The essay brings to light lesser-known facets of crime fiction, such as its role in children’s literature for social justice education or its depiction in countries like Indonesia. The draft effectively situates crime fiction within broader historical and cultural contexts. Putting things in their proper historical context, like talking about Japan’s Meiji Era or Italy’s WWII, makes the story more exciting and gives the subject more meaning. The placeholders for sections on “audiobooks” and “courtrooms” suggest that you envision a more expansive discussion on the topic. Your writing shows forward-thinking and the promise of a more comprehensive piece.


 * 1) Your draft's working thesis proposes a refined representation of crime fiction on Wikipedia by integrating diverse global perspectives. It says that how it’s shown now might be too Westernized and that other parts show how the genre has changed in places like Australia, Indonesia, Japan, Italy, and Indonesia. You talk about how each area’s history, culture, and politics differ. Also, the fact that specific subgenres like children’s crime fiction and podcasts need to be looked into shows how popular and different the category is. Your thesis argues that Wikipedia should have a more complete and global picture of crime fiction.


 * 1) Some changes to your writing could include more vital transitions between paragraphs to make it easier to read. You could also dig further into the historical circumstances. There is still an opportunity for further research on historical or cultural events. Some content is getting repeated, particularly when explaining the necessity for separate sections on other nations. Streamlining such repeats might help to make the essay shorter.