User:Bilsonian/Prohear, Cambodia/Banana.oceans Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Bilsonian and Fe.were


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bilsonian/Prohear%2C_Cambodia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Not applicable

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: While your draft does provide me with some idea of where your article is going, it would be helpful to have more overarching, key points in your lead. For example, how does Prohear fit into the larger history of Cambodia and the surrounding area? It may also be helpful to include a general overview of the topics that will be covered. On the other hand, I can see that you will likely be addressing points such as analysis of remains from the population that once lived there, in addition to gold grave goods. However, if the rest of your article is written in the same concise manner that I've seen so far, I think you'll be well on your way to having a great article!

Content: The content added does contribute to a better understanding of Prohear. The publishing dates of the article sources are dated to within the last 10 or so years, which, given the underrepresentation of SEA archeology, is pretty good in my opinion! At this point, there is quite a bit of information missing from this article, though I recognize this is only a draft. It may have been helpful to have some headers so we could understand what content you plan on addressing in your article.

Tone and Balance: I find your article to be neutral, though I might argue about the most significant find of the site to be gold grave goods. This may be an area to address further, with the limited amount of information from this article so far, I can see people neglecting other aspects of this site, such as cultural knowledge gained. I'd be interested to see what other discoveries and conclusions that were drawn from Prohear.

Sources and References: After reviewing the sources for your article, not only did all the links work (fantastic!), but the sources are from reputable journals. After investigating the background of the authors, it looks like the majority are from European universities, with one from the Royal University of Fine Arts in Phnom Penh, Cambodia. It would be interesting to see if researchers from SEA, especially Cambodia, would have different insights into Prohear. In general, however, I think having more sources would improve the reliability and information in your article.

Organization: The content is well-written and concise. While I don't see any spelling or grammatical errors, there aren't any section heading yet. Section headings would be helpful for outlining your article.

Images and Media: Not applicable.

For New Articles Only: Your article meets Wikipedia's notability requirements, with 2-3 reliable sources. The list of sources, while informative, could use additional research and sources as well. As of right now, this article does not really look similar to others given the lack of headings and whatnot. However, the article does include links to other subjects within it that could be helpful for readers to have access to.

Overall Impressions: I think the content added so far is valuable to the creation of a greater article. I appreciate the important points highlighted in your article, including analysis of remains, health information, and gold grave goods. I look forward to seeing what additional information you will add to this article and how you arrange it!