User:Bilsonian/Prohear, Cambodia/CrustyToast Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Fe.were, Bilsonian


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bilsonian/Prohear%2C_Cambodia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your article lead is pretty strong: "Prohear is an archaeological site in Prey Veng province in southern Cambodia. It is significant due to the high quantity of gold artifacts found in burials." Of course, I would recommend moving it to the top of the page, and maybe include the recovery of human dental remains as an additional reason the site is significant. Also make sure to include information about the gold artifacts in a separate section beneath the article lead.

"Due to the environmental conditions at the site, there was generally very poor preservation of human skeletal remains, greatly limiting the analysis that the researchers could conduct. Instead, they focused on dental remains, finding evidence that the people who lived in the area were generally healthy, despite the expected high rate of child mortality."

I think maybe you could shorten this section to be more concise. Maybe "there was very poor preservation of skeletal remains at the Prey Veng site, but human dental remains were recovered. Research on these remains has shown that the people who occupied the site were generally healthy, despite experiencing a high rate of child mortality."

More work needs to be done organizing your article, but I'm sure you'll get there. Creating the headers first-for information I thought was going to be important-really helped me get into a workflow and helped me organize my article. I also found it helpful to look at other similar articles, like Angkor Wat, to help me with formatting and knowing where to start.

A few more sources wouldn't hurt your article, and I'm sure you will find them as you complete your article. I find JSTOR to be a good resource, and it is available on the UO Library website, under "databases."

You have a lot more work to do, but you have a decent start, especially with your article lead.